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Swallowed by the Monster... A Narrative by Jonive

Sunday, August 22, 2010 | Writer's Wall


When I was on the rocks I could see the crashing waves all around me. They all looked like an enormous frightened monster. It was a humungous monster. I couldn't believe it! It had sharp shiny teeth and it looked like it wanted to eat me and swallow me. The monster scared me.

When I was in the sea I felt like I was about to drown but I saw people on the rocks. I was calling but they didn't hear me. I saw a rock close by and I wrapped my arms around it. As I yelled "Help me!" I saw someone running.

When I saw the lifeguard I put my hand right out and I was really excited that someone was coming to help me.
"Are you ok?" the lifeguard yelled out to me.
"Help me!" I cried.
I felt so relieved to be pulled into the orange boat.

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2 comments:

Room 5 Tamaki Primary said...

WOW!!! This is awesome writing Jonive! I love your description of the monstrous waves. Great work!
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Mrs Fepuleai

August 22, 2010 7:52 PM
Mrs Kelly said...

Well done, Jonive. I love the words you chose to express yourself in this story - especially when you compared the crashing waves to a humungous monster!

August 23, 2010 2:09 AM

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